Series: Mind, Body & Soul Part 1
Author: J. A. Molvanie
Published: February 2, 2020 by J. A. Molvanie
Price: $2.99 on Kindle.
Blurb: Na-Leigh was an ordinary girl who led an ordinary life. Until one fateful night, the very mysterious Rujcharm d’ Varq crashed into her ordinary world. He shook the very foundation of it with his extraordinary claim. Should she accept his claim and conform her mind to his extraordinary world?
Review: This book was a gift from the author in exchange for an honest review and I am sorry, but this was a DNF for me. I got about 3 pages into Chapter 3 after almost a month of not reading it and I just had to stop.
I love that people are putting themselves out there and publishing their creations themselves, I would love to see more people do it and keep at it, but I really think this could have benefited from a lot more editing and proof-reading.
Friends and family that don’t mind reading over things for you and helping you edit things. Even the author of a book can proof-read and edit. Just leaving something alone for a while and then coming back and reading over it. I know when I’ve written something to someone or even having just written a review, I’ll come back and read over it and there are mistakes and typos that I didn’t catch on my first time over it. So just taking that extra time to look over and read again and again could make it something really special.
The conversation tone mixed the story-telling tone also wasn’t working. It’s like I could see the main character sitting across from me, telling me what’s happened and then it would turn into where she’s describing sliding into the bath and going “Aaahh” or something of that nature. Sentences that seemed like they should have been italicized to represent this thought in the main characters head that were just part of the story itself was kind of jarring. Some sentences that could have used contractions didn’t have them.
Again, things that can benefit from a little more time in the rough draft section of the book. I feel like it could have been something interesting and I’m sure it gets more interesting the further you read on, but I wasn’t drawn in and hooked.
Keep publishing and putting your creations out there, but remember that editing and proof-reading will be your saving grace.
Thank you for reading my review.